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The line graphs below show the number of hospital beds per 1,000 people, the percentage of patients who waited up to one month and those who waited more than one month for elective surgery in five countries in 2010, 2014 and 2018.

方法1：一图一段

方法2（本篇文章按照此种分段方法）：

l Body 1：hospital beds availability

l Body 2：UK、Canada手术等待时间

l Body 3：Sweden、Australia、Mexico手术等待时间

开头段

The line graphs compare the UK, Australia, Canada, Sweden and Mexico across two aspects (the number of hospital beds per 1,000 people and the proportion of people waiting for less than or more than one month for elective surgery) in 2010, 2014 and 2018.

概述段

Overall, the datareveals a negative correlationbetween the availability of hospital beds and surgical waiting times. Withhigher bed capacities, Sweden and Australiaprovided more efficient surgical carefor their patients.In contrast, people in the other three nationstypically experienced longer delaysfor elective surgical procedures.

思路要点：

- 床位数量与手术等待时长负相关

- Sweden、Australia床位较多，因此手术等待时间较短；其余三个国家的病人等待时间较久

Body paragraph 1

Regardingbeds capacity,althoughCanada and Australiastarted with higher levels(5 and 4.5 in 2010), their figuresdecreased graduallyby 0.5 in 2018. The UKalsosaw a decline,butat a faster rate,reachingaround 3 by 2018.In comparison, the remaining twocountries recorded constant growth, with Swedenreaching4.5 and Mexicoamounting to2.8 per 1,000 people by 2018.

思路要点：

- Canada、Australia在2010年数值较高(5和4.5)→到2018年逐步下降了0.5

- UK数值大幅下降，2018年达到3

- Sweden、Mexico数值持续上升，2018年达到4.5和2.8

Body paragraph 2

Due to the reduction in the number of available clinical beds, the UK and Canadasaw a decreasein efficiency, with the proportion of patients receiving surgery within 30 daysfalling significantlyto merely 40% by 2018.However, the proportion of patients who waited longer than a month in these two countriesrecorded a dramatic increase,soaring to60% in 2018.

思路要点：

- UK、Canada

- UK、Canada能够在30天内做手术的病人比例显著下降，到2018年达到40%

- 这两个国家手术等待时间超过30天的病人比例急剧上升到2018年的60%

Body paragraph 3

In contrast, the other three countries demonstrated notable improvement in waiting times. The majority of people in Sweden and Australia were consistently treated within a month, with figuresrising modestlyfrom 70% to roughly 80% over the period. Mexicofollowed a similar trend, with the percentage of people receiving surgery in 30 daysclimbing steadilyto 60% by 2018.

思路要点：

- Sweden、Australia、Mexico

- Sweden、Australia大部分病人可以在30天内接受手术，比例从大约 70%显著上升到80%

- Mexico可以在30天内手术的人数比例也上升，2018年达到60%

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