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The Madonnas of Echo Park

She yanked out a taffy-drop hunk of flour and, slapping it on the block, rolled it into a thin tent-flap-shaped pancake. Then came a morsel of crabmeat, followed by an index finger moistened in the lemon water, kissing the edges of the pancake to create a momentary seal. A quick swoop of her hand, and the pancake was folded over in half. Bunching her fingers together, she kneaded small, ridged impressions onto the dough’s edges, plopping fat, raindrop dumplings onto the counter. He mimicked her motions, but his dumplings popped open, their deformed folds and ridges jutting out like baby fingers in clay. (特别注意这一段的动词和有动词形式的分词。最后一句讲没有包好的饺子，也就是我们俗称露馅儿的那种，作者用到baby fingers in clay这样的比喻，让人忍俊不禁)

“You’re packing them too big!” Tran exclaimed with a laugh. “Give me your hands.”

Her palm guided the backs of his hands across each ingredient, her fingertips dripping lemon water down his arm as their hands wrapped each dumpling together…Her black eye shadow brought out the delicate whalebone whites of her cheeks. And then, her face crinkled like wrapping paper when she stood on tiptoe to kiss him, with a look of either utter amazement at her recklessness or astonishment at the sincerity of her affection, right before she saw me looking at them and shoved him away.（女孩手把手教男孩儿包饺子，然后是二人亲密的小动作，没有察觉旁边的老人，而等女孩发现的时候，她把男孩推开。注意此处用的shove，而非push。为何？学一下这个短语：when push comes to shove就知道原因了。通过这一段的描绘，作者把读者带到老人的“帮凶”的位置）

They made plans to elope, but for a reason that escapes, the plans fell through and what at that time was seen as a temporary setback became permanent separation, and the life I thought they’d be living now, the life I thought I’d see them have as a grandfather, haunted me—the hundreds of dinners they never cooked together, the photos I’d see from their family vacation trips to faraway places like Disney World or New York City left untaken, the children they never had tugging at my sleeves in a toy store asking me for a Barbie Dream House or a radio-controlled car, and me, hefting them up on my shoulders, planting a kiss on my daughter-in-law’s cheek, then waking up from my dream and realizing nobody was there.（这段提及二人准备私奔，但不知何故未能成行，直至永远的分手。在老人伤感的梦中，是他们未能在一起做的数百个晚餐、他们没有去成的迪斯尼和纽约之旅、是他们本应生下的孩子缠着爷爷买芭比玩具以及爷爷把孙子扛在肩上……梦醒之后，老人身边空无一人。这一段读来异常感伤，作者只提供了一些画面，而读者在脑补这些画面的时候，自然融情于兹）

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