支招小作文(208) I 动态表 新西兰六个行业男女员工比例变化

December 12, 2024

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The table below shows employment patterns for males and females in New Zealand in 1993 and 2003.

【主体段分段】：按照 <性别> 分段

Body 1：Men

Body 2：Women

开头段

The table illustrates changes in the percentage of males and females working in six different industries between 1993 and 2003.

概述段

In both years, maleswere primarily employed inIT, farming, and construction,whilethe top three fields favored byfemales were services, commerce, and manufacturing.Also, female workersoutnumberedtheir male counterparts in commerce and services,whereasthe remaining four sectors saw higher male participation.

思路要点：

- 两年内，男性工作比例最高的是IT、farming 和building，女性主要在services、commerce 和manufacturing工作

- 两年内，Commerce和Services工作的女性基本都大于男性，剩下行业规律相反

Body paragraph 1

Clearly, four industriessaw a decline inthe proportion of male employees. Initially, ITtopped the list(80%),followed bythe figures in farming (75%) and building (68%).Subsequently,there was a noticeable dropof roughly 10% in these three figures. The percentage of men working in manufacturingalsodecreased,but only marginally,reaching52% in 2003.In contrast, the proportion of male workers in commerce and services increased.This was particularly true forservices, which, despite beingthe least favorite sectorin 1993,saw its figure more than double to40% by the end of the period.

思路要点：Men

- 有四个行业的男职工比例下降

- 1993年IT数据最高(80%)，farming排第二(75%)，building排第三(68%)；2003年这三个数据都显著下降了大约10%

- manufacturing数据也下降，但幅度较小，轻微下降到2003年的52%

- commerce、services数据上升

- services数据在1993年最小→2003年上涨2倍多达到40%

Body paragraph 2

However, a different trend emerged inwomen’s employment.Specifically, services and commerce werethe most attractive sectorsin both years,but theirfemale participationexperienced a decrease.Especially, serviceswitnessed a dramatic dropfrom 85% in 1993 to 60% in 2003.Among the other four industries, the most significant increases occurred in IT and farming, where female participation rose by 10% during the period. Manufacturing was the only filed where the proportion of womenremained relatively unchanged, staying stable ataround 46%.

思路要点：Women

- services、commerce两年数据都最大，但都呈现下降趋势；services下降急剧，从1993的85%急剧下降到2003年的60%

- 其余四个行业数据呈现上升趋势

- IT、farming上升最为显著（上升了10%）

- 只有manufacturing数据几乎变，平稳在大约46%

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