余光中曾翻译了桑塔亚纳的《给W.P.》诗(第二首),原文如下:
With you a part of me hath passed away;
For in the peopled forest of my mind ,
A tree made leafless by this wintry wind ,
Shall never don again its green array.
Chapel and fireside,country road and bay,
Have something of their friendliness resigned;
Another,if I would, I could not find ,
And I am grown much older in a day.
But yet I treasure in my memory,
Your gift of charity and young heart's ease,
And the dear honour of your amity;
For these once mine, my life is rich with these.
And I scarce know which part may greater be --
What I keep of you , or you rob from me.
余光中的译文:
我生命的一部分已随你消亡;
因为在我心里那人物的林中,
一棵树飘零于冬日的寒风,
再不能披上它嫩绿的春装。
教堂、炉边、郊路和港湾,
都丧失些许往日的温情;
另一个,就如我愿意,也无法追寻,
在一日之内我白发加长。
但是我仍然在记忆里珍藏
你仁慈的于性、你轻松的童心,
和你那可爱的、可敬的亲祥;
这一些曾属于我,但充实了我的生命。
我不能分辩哪一分较巨——
是我保留住你的,还是你带走我的
对于这个译文,李敖大加鞭挞,说“余光中口口声声奚落‘西化的中文’,但他这首译诗,却是标准的‘西化的中文’。孰好孰坏,大家比较之后见分晓。
李敖的改译
李敖一九七二年十月间在狱中时,曾改译如下:
冬风扫叶时节,一树萧条如洗,
绿装已卸,卸在我心里。
我生命的一部分,已消亡
随着你。
教堂、炉边、郊路和港湾,
情味都今非昔比。
虽有余情,也难追寻,
一日之间,我不知老了几许?
你天性的善良、慈爱和轻快,
曾属于我,跟我一起。
我不知道哪一部分多——
是你带走的我,
还是我留下的你。
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